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I understand your intentions behind the bitlets project, but I think this piece could draw some serious benefit from some editing. The scope of the piece is excellent. It draws a simple instance of diction and makes it a metaphor for respect, wisdom, and intelligence. It has a lingering quality because it is so relatable. It's the sort of piece that when speaking to our "granparents" readers are likely to remember. The phrasing has good meter and is easily read with effective intonation. I think this piece would lend well to being read aloud. Excellent work on this piece, Nic.
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